
It was a strange and desolate place. From the road, the building almost melted into the hillside. Its purpose was obscure. One could not tell how long the barbed wire fencing went, and so far there was no gate.
Patchy snow remained here and there, indicating the oncoming spring. Still, the only color was drab. Desolate. Dreary.
Then the driver mashed the brake pedal, a scream choking his throat! What had risen up from nothing was horrifying, monstrous. Man? Beast? Sci-fi monster? They loomed before the Humvee, pulsating, wordless.
“CUT! That’s a wrap! Take five, everyone.”
Dear Linda,
Phew! Glad it was only a movie. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks 🙂
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Perfect for a movie scene.
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Thank you 🙂
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Nice to find a movie doing the special effects for real not with computer graphics, they don’t make ’em like they used to! Good fun reveal 🙂
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Thanks, Iain.
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Good descriptions, Linda
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Thanks 🙂
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that’s a new take on the “it was all a dream” twist.
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Yes. I didn’t want to go there.
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“The only color was drab”. I like how you lull us into a sense of of drowsy complacency, like a long car ride and then spring the monster on us–and then tell us you’re just kidding.
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Thanks, Andy. I appreciate your comment.
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Just when I was beginning to think this was uncharacteristically dark for you, the clapper board snapped! Excellent.
‘Retribution’, my short story.
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Thanks, Keith. It was going to be dark, but right at the last minute I got the movie idea 🙂
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Whewwwwwffff!
Glad this was only a movie!
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🙂
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You had me going. Without that last line you would leave us all using our imaginations.
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Yes. “CUT!” came just in time 🙂
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You had me going there for a minute. Well-played twist!
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Thanks, Jade 🙂
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You are welcome 🙂
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If the acting is as good as the descriptions, they are gonna have a box office hit!
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Ha! Yes, I imagine so 🙂
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That’s a good landscape for a horror film. “Drab” would be a good official colour 🙂
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My dad always wanted every room in the house painted beige. He said it was a non-color, and made decorating easy. I always hated it. Drab. Blech.
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That was a relief!
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Exactly. Thanks, Sandra.
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I could “hear” the first part as a voice-over for the movie. Fun twist.
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Thanks,Tannille.
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Just pretending – thank goodness for that!
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Nice, thats a wrap! Great idea.
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Thanks 🙂
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I wish the dreadful only existed in movies. Well done, Linda!
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Wouldn’t that be amazing!
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Hahahaha. Gotta love the movies. Spaghetti anyone?
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🙂
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A good story with great descriptions, Linda. That was a terrific ending twist. All that tension, then CUT! Well written. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thanks, Suzanne 🙂
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Loved the description – had me hooked, and the clever twist at the end.
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Thanks 🙂
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Great twist, love it! 🙂
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Thanks, Brenda 🙂
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Ha. That caught me out. Clever!!
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What a great ending. I thought zombies ~ you presented a movie set. Well done.
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Not content with barbed wire, the place is being guarded by monsters! What is going on?
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Anything you want, Abhijit 🙂
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Nice twist at the end, Linda 🙂
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Thanks 🙂
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A lovely descriptive piece and with an ending that pulls you out of the hypnotic sense of the scene.
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Thanks, James.
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Bah! You got me!
Your well-done description sucked me in and suckered me good – Well done, Linda!
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Oh goodie! I love it when a plan comes together 🙂
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Ha! Ha! Got totally tricked by that one, great twist at the end.
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That makes me happy 🙂
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Oh I love the description that was certainly more colorful than the landscape… great twist in the end.
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Thanks, Bjorn.
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OH, she screams… what an ending that was! 😮 🙂 ❤
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🙂
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