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Moira loved the castle ruins. She often escaped to the grassy inner courtyard to daydream for hours. She never felt lonely.
At 15, her daydreams became as reality. She saw ladies draped in flowing silks. Gentlemen were not so fine, appearing in rougher dress for hunting or war.
One man always appeared. Tall; dark, unruly hair; eyes the color of a stormy ocean. He gazed at her, wordlessly beckoning.
At 21, she returned. In the afternoon, she sat on the grass and dreamed. Just as the first stars appeared, he came. He offered his hand. She took it, with no regrets.
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(A note from the struggling author: As this story unrolled, the words and pictures flowed like water from a spring. I decided to let it come, and I have to say I loved the story as I wrote it then. However, It was 170 words. It felt like cutting out my heart, but 70 words are gone and I have followed the rules. I’m not unhappy with the result. I think the story is the same at its core–you just have to use a little more imagination!)
The best stories leave room for the imagination to fill in the blanks. Nicely done.
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I love it, Granonine! The story was lyrical and the sweetness of it was perfect. :o)
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Thank you. Sometimes cutting to the core makes the story better.
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“eyes the color of a stormy ocean” is a fine piece of writing
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I loved it! A sweet story and it flowed well.
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Very well done and spooky, too. 🙂
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I rarely like cutting my stories, but you did well
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I didn’t like it! But I can certainly see the value in learning to be concise to tell a story.
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I loved it, Linda. Agree with Neil – loved the “eyes the colour of a stormy ocean” – He sounds dreamy… Hey… maybe he’s like Jamie from Outlander 😉
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A great read.
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Is it reality or dream? Is she alive or gone forever . Such a well woven story . Brilliant!
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Ah, you’ll have to answer those questions for yourself! Thanks, Moon 🙂
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Love the story! And the great thing is, if you feel it needs more, you can always use it as a draft and go from here.
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Yes indeed. Already thinking about that 🙂
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You must have no regrets too, Linda, with the fruits of your labour. A fine tale, well told.
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Why, thank you most kindly 🙂
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Oooo, this is nice!
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Dear Linda,
Fairy tales can come true, it can happen to you, if you’re young at heart. 😉 Sorry, I couldn’t help myself. I enjoyed the read. I know how it can be to cut all those words. I hope you kept your draft though. You never know when those extra 70 might have a use. Lovely story.
Shalom
Rochelle
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Okay, now you have given me an earworm 🙂 Thanks very much, Rochelle.
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Very romantic and exactly what I would have dreamed of at that age too! You did well to encapsulate all that in 100 words. Good job
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I think you did a fantastic job pruning a longer story. We get the picture. Nicely done.
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Thanks. I know it’s an experience we’ve all had, but this is the first time I’ve really found it difficult to slice and dice
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Ooooh, this reads like the beginning of a great romantic time travel or fantasy story. I’ld love to read more. 🙂
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Thanks 🙂
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A lovely fairy-tale.
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