photo@J.Hardy Carroll
The children sped by on the roller skates clamped to their sneakers. Some grabbed at the bars of the iron fence, building their speed. They all craned their necks at the estate that took up a whole city block. None of them had ever dared to venture inside, and parents warned their children to stay away.
They never saw people. No one was ever in the vast yard, mowing or trimming; yet it always appeared to have been freshly groomed each morning.
“I’m going in there someday,” whispered Johnny.
“Then why’re you whispering?” taunted Susie. “Fraidy cat!”
Dear Linda,
Ah those skates that clamped to our Keds. 😉 I remember those…complete with the skate key around my neck on a lanyard. The dialogue was true to life. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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We practically lived on our skates during the summer and fall, and there really was an estate like the one in the picture. I never knew anything about it. Wonder if it’s still there.
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We didn’t have an estate nearby where I lived but we did spend the summers either on skates or bicycles. (And we survived without helmets!)
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Your short story gives an opening for all kinds of imagination. We see the potential for an Alice-in-Wonderland or a dark & scary adventure inside.
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My sister read this and immediately remembered the place we used to skate past, never being brave enough to go exploring 🙂
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I loved this!
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Then I’m happy 🙂
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I somehow lost your second comment about sociopaths and PTSD. Those posts were written in a series I’ve dropped for now, but that I called Friday Counseling Issues. Are you a therapist, as I am?
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I wouldn’t go in there if I was you Johnny! Spooky tale.
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I love what the whisper and the question says about the characters. They are close, they know each other well, and they both understand that something is not quite right about that place.
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You got that! Yay!
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This was so real. I could just see the kids reacting this way!
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Thanks, Dale. It is based in reality. The best stories usually are 🙂
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Great dialogue from children the world over
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As children we certainly learn to whisper, great story
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Loved smart spunky Susie. The imagery of the kids with the clip of rolle rskates was nicely done.
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That’s the first step towards breaking and entering…
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Ha! Well, we never thought much about legalities in our daydreams of going inside that fence 🙂
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Every town has a house like this I suspect. The stories we weave from them!
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Haha, that was cute. I enjoyed this.
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This is a fun read. I like the trip I took down memory lane. My skates never stayed on my sneakers. I had more falls than I could count. This is a feel good story. Love it …
Isadora 😎
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Those skate keys got a workout, for sure! I’m glad you enjoyed the story 🙂
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