Haiku

Day 17 Seventeen Syllables

June 17, 1971.  The Okinawa Reversion Agreement was signed. This agreement between the United States and Japan returned control of Okinawa to Japan.

A Haiku is a traditional Japanese form of poetry. It is three lines: the first and third lines have five syllables each and the second line has seven syllables for a total of seventeen syllables. They are often about nature.

Write a Haiku. Please include a picture that illustrates your poem.

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The skies wept with grief

Flooding the land and filling the oceans

Bringing life with grey mourning.

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June 17 Challenge

Here’s a note from a friend who paid more attention to the details than I did:

Good morning Linda,

Here’s a comment about your haiku post.

This syllable count negotiable in the English-speaking world, but a haiku traditionally has 17 syllables, not seventeen words.

Take the “ings” off to reduce your syllable count. Like:

the skies weep with grief
flood the land, fill the oceans
life comes of sorrow

Or something to that effect. (I’ll try sending this comment through the Reader and see if it comes through on your blog.)

I appreciate her pointing out my error. And I feel silly, because I know this.  Just wasn’t using what I know 🙂

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